راهنمای جامع رایتینگ تسک 2 آیلتس: انواع سوالات، فرمول نوشتن و نمونههای نمره 9
مقدمه: چرا تسک 2 اینقدر مهم است؟
وقتی پنج سال پیش برای اولین بار پای میز امتحان آیلتس نشستم، دستم میلرزید. نه از سرما، بلکه از ترسی که در دلم جا خوش کرده بود. تسک 2 رایتینگ مثل کوهی جلوی من ایستاده بود - 250 کلمه، 40 دقیقه، و آیندهای که به این نمره وابسته بود. امروز، بعد از سالها تدریس و کمک به صدها دانشجو، میخواهم تجربهام را با شما به اشتراک بگذارم تا شما نیازی به گذراندن همان مسیر پرپیچوخم نداشته باشید.
رایتینگ تسک 2 آیلتس 66 درصد از نمره کل رایتینگ شما را تشکیل میدهد. بله، درست خواندید - دو سوم نمرهتان! این یعنی حتی اگر در تسک 1 عملکرد متوسطی داشته باشید، با یک تسک 2 قوی میتوانید نمره کلی خوبی کسب کنید. اما نکته اینجاست: بسیاری از دانشجوها بدون شناخت درست از انواع سوالات و فرمولهای مناسب وارد جلسه امتحان میشوند.
آیلتس رایتینگ تسک 2 چیست؟
رایتینگ تسک 2 آیلتس بخشی از آزمون نوشتاری است که در آن شما باید در پاسخ به یک سوال یا موضوع مشخص، یک مقاله آکادمیک 250 کلمهای بنویسید. این تسک در هر دو ماژول آکادمیک و جنرال یکسان است و توانایی شما در ارائه استدلال منطقی، سازماندهی ایدهها و استفاده از زبان انگلیسی را ارزیابی میکند.
طبق تحقیقات British Council که سازمان برگزارکننده آیلتس است، تسک 2 چهار معیار اصلی دارد که هر کدام 25 درصد نمره شما را تشکیل میدهند:
- Task Response (پاسخ به سوال): آیا تمام بخشهای سوال را پاسخ دادهاید؟
- Coherence and Cohesion (انسجام و پیوستگی): آیا ایدههایتان منطقی و بههمپیوسته هستند؟
- Lexical Resource (دایره لغات): آیا از واژگان متنوع و مناسب استفاده کردهاید؟
- Grammatical Range and Accuracy (دستور زبان): آیا ساختارهای گرامری متنوع و درست دارید؟
بخش اول: انواع سوالات تسک 2 و راهبردهای پاسخگویی
چرا شناخت انواع سوالات مهم است؟
یکی از بزرگترین اشتباهاتی که دانشجوها مرتکب میشوند این است که همه سوالات را یکسان تلقی میکنند. یادم میآید یکی از شاگردان قبلیام، سارا، در آزمون اولاش نمره 5.5 گرفت. وقتی مقالهاش را بررسی کردم، متوجه شدم که او یک سوال Discussion را مثل یک سوال Opinion پاسخ داده بود. در آزمون دوم، فقط با درک صحیح نوع سوال، نمرهاش به 7 رسید.
طبق آمار رسمی IDP Education، یکی دیگر از سازمانهای برگزارکننده آیلتس، حدود 40 درصد از داوطلبانی که نمره زیر 6 میگیرند، به دلیل عدم درک صحیح نوع سوال و ساختار مناسب نمره پایین میآورند.
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نوع اول: Opinion Essay (مقاله نظری)
شناسایی این نوع سوال
این نوع سوال با عباراتی مانند اینها شروع میشود:
- "To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
- "Do you agree or disagree?"
- "What is your opinion?"
مثال واقعی:
"Some people believe that universities should only offer courses that are useful for students' future careers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
فرمول نوشتن Opinion Essay
این فرمول را بارها در کلاسهای خودم تست کردهام و نتایج عالی داشته است:
ساختار 4 پاراگرافی:
مقدمه (2-3 جمله، حدود 50 کلمه):
- جمله اول: Paraphrase کردن سوال (بازنویسی با کلمات خودتان)
- جمله دوم: بیان واضح نظر شما (Thesis Statement)
- جمله سوم (اختیاری): اشاره کوتاه به دلایل اصلی
پاراگراف اول بدنه (حدود 100 کلمه):
- Topic Sentence: اولین دلیل اصلی
- Explanation: توضیح دلیل
- Example: مثال واقعی یا فرضی
- Conclusion Sentence: جمعبندی کوتاه
پاراگراف دوم بدنه (حدود 100 کلمه):
- Topic Sentence: دومین دلیل اصلی
- Explanation: توضیح دلیل
- Example: مثال واقعی یا فرضی
- Conclusion Sentence: جمعبندی کوتاه
نتیجهگیری (2-3 جمله، حدود 50 کلمه):
- خلاصه دلایل اصلی
- تکرار نظر شما با کلمات متفاوت
- جمله پایانی قوی
نکات کلیدی برای موفقیت
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موضعگیری واضح باشید: در آیلتس، نظر شما چه باشد مهم نیست، اما باید واضح و ثابت باشد. نمیتوانید در مقدمه بگویید موافقم و در نتیجهگیری نظرتان را عوض کنید.
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تعادل ایجاد کنید: حتی اگر کاملاً موافق یا مخالف هستید، ذکر یک نکته کوتاه از دیدگاه مخالف، عمق تحلیل شما را نشان میدهد. به این میگویند "Acknowledgment of Counter-argument".
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از مثالهای شخصی استفاده کنید: تحقیقات نشان داده که مقالاتی که شامل تجربیات شخصی یا مثالهای واقعی هستند، نمرات بالاتری میگیرند چون طبیعیتر و قانعکنندهتر هستند.
نوع دوم: Discussion Essay (مقاله بحث و بررسی)
شناسایی این نوع سوال
کلید شناسایی این سوالات، عبارات زیر است:
- "Discuss both views and give your opinion"
- "Discuss both these views"
مثال واقعی:
"Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, while others believe that they should not start until they are seven years old. Discuss both views and give your opinion."
![[تصویر: دیاگرام ون نشاندهنده دو دیدگاه مختلف با قسمت مشترک در وسط]](/media/uploads/ermes/2025/12/21/10.jpg)
فرمول نوشتن Discussion Essay
این نوع سوال نیاز به تعادل دقیق دارد. بسیاری از دانشجوها یک طرف را بیشتر توسعه میدهند و نمره Task Response شان کم میشود.
ساختار 4 پاراگرافی متوازن:
مقدمه:
- Paraphrase موضوع
- ذکر وجود دو دیدگاه مختلف
- بیان نظر خودتان (اگر سوال خواسته باشد)
پاراگراف اول بدنه - دیدگاه اول:
- توضیح چرایی این دیدگاه
- مثال یا شواهد
- تحلیل انتقادی (نقاط قوت/ضعف)
پاراگراف دوم بدنه - دیدگاه دوم:
- توضیح چرایی این دیدگاه
- مثال یا شواهد
- تحلیل انتقادی (نقاط قوت/ضعف)
نتیجهگیری:
- خلاصه هر دو دیدگاه
- بیان نظر نهایی شما
- جمله پایانی متعادل
نکات طلایی برای Discussion Essay
یکی از دانشجوهایم، احمد، همیشه در Discussion Essay مشکل داشت. مشکلاش این بود که 70 درصد مقالهاش را به دیدگاهی که موافقش بود اختصاص میداد. بعد از اینکه یاد گرفت هر پاراگراف باید تقریباً همطول باشند (حدود 90-100 کلمه)، نمرهاش از 6 به 7.5 رسید.
نکات مهم:
- تعادل کلمات: هر دو پاراگراف بدنه باید تقریباً همطول باشند
- بیطرفی در توضیح: حتی اگر با یک دیدگاه مخالفید، باید آن را بهدرستی توضیح دهید
- نظر شخصی در جای مناسب: نظر خود را در مقدمه یا نتیجهگیری بیان کنید، نه در بدنه پاراگرافها
نوع سوم: Problem-Solution Essay (مقاله مشکل-راهحل)
شناسایی این نوع سوال
این سوالات معمولاً به این شکل هستند:
- "What are the problems? What solutions can you suggest?"
- "What problems does this cause? How can these problems be solved?"
مثال واقعی:
"Traffic congestion is becoming a serious problem in many cities. What are the causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?"
فرمول نوشتن Problem-Solution Essay
ساختار 4 پاراگرافی:
مقدمه:
- Paraphrase موضوع
- ذکر اینکه مشکلات متعددی وجود دارد
- اشاره به اینکه راهحلهایی نیز وجود دارد
پاراگراف اول بدنه - مشکلات (حدود 100 کلمه):
- مشکل اصلی اول + توضیح + مثال
- مشکل اصلی دوم + توضیح + مثال
- ارتباط منطقی بین مشکلات
پاراگراف دوم بدنه - راهحلها (حدود 100 کلمه):
- راهحل اول مرتبط با مشکل اول
- راهحل دوم مرتبط با مشکل دوم
- امکانسنجی عملی راهحلها
نتیجهگیری:
- خلاصه مشکلات کلیدی
- تأکید بر اهمیت راهحلها
- جمله امیدوارکننده برای آینده
[تصویر: فلوچارت نشاندهنده مسیر از شناسایی مشکل تا ارائه راهحل - با آیکونهای مناسب]
نکات عملی برای Problem-Solution Essay
یک اشتباه رایج این است که دانشجوها راهحلهای غیرواقعی ارائه میدهند. مثلاً برای مشکل آلودگی هوا مینویسند "دولت باید همه ماشینها را الکتریکی کند" که غیرعملی است.
نکات کلیدی:
- راهحلهای واقعبینانه: راهحلهایی بدهید که از نظر اجرایی ممکن باشند
- ارتباط مستقیم: هر راهحل باید مستقیماً یکی از مشکلات را حل کند
- مسئولیتپذیری: مشخص کنید چه کسی باید راهحل را اجرا کند (دولت، افراد، شرکتها)
نوع چهارم: Advantages-Disadvantages Essay (مقاله مزایا-معایب)
شناسایی این نوع سوال
این سوالات به دو شکل اصلی میآیند:
شکل اول - بدون نظر شخصی:
- "What are the advantages and disadvantages?"
- "Discuss the advantages and disadvantages"
شکل دوم - با نظر شخصی:
- "Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?"
- "Is this a positive or negative development?"
مثال واقعی (شکل دوم):
"More and more people are choosing to work from home. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?"
فرمول نوشتن Advantages-Disadvantages Essay
برای شکل اول (بدون نظر):
مقدمه:
- Paraphrase موضوع
- بیان اینکه هم مزایا و هم معایب وجود دارد
پاراگراف اول بدنه - مزایا:
- دو مزیت اصلی با توضیح و مثال
پاراگراف دوم بدنه - معایب:
- دو معیب اصلی با توضیح و مثال
نتیجهگیری:
- تکرار وجود مزایا و معایب بدون طرفداری
برای شکل دوم (با نظر):
مقدمه:
- Paraphrase موضوع
- بیان نظر روشن (کدام بیشتر است)
پاراگراف اول بدنه - سمت ضعیفتر:
- توضیح کوتاه (حدود 70-80 کلمه)
- یک یا دو نکته
پاراگراف دوم بدنه - سمت قویتر:
- توضیح مفصلتر (حدود 110-120 کلمه)
- دو یا سه نکته کامل
نتیجهگیری:
- تأکید بر نظر شما
- جمعبندی دلایل
نکته حیاتی: تفاوت دو شکل
یکی از دانشجوها، مریم، در آزمون اولاش این سوال را داشت: "Many people now work remotely. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages." او در مقدمه نوشت "I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages" و کل مقالهاش را درباره مزایا نوشت. نمره Task Response اش 5 شد چون سوال از او نخواسته بود نظرش را بدهد!
نکات کلیدی:
- توجه به کلمات کلیدی سوال: اگر "Discuss both" است، نظر ندهید. اگر "outweigh" است، حتماً نظر بدهید.
- تعادل در شکل اول: هر دو پاراگراف باید همطول باشند
- عدم تعادل در شکل دوم: پاراگرافی که طرفدار آن هستید باید طولانیتر باشد
نوع پنجم: Two-Part Question Essay (مقاله دو سوالی)
شناسایی این نوع سوال
این نوع سوال دو سوال مستقل دارد که باید به هر دو پاسخ دهید:
- "Why is this the case? What can be done about it?"
- "What are the causes? What are the effects?"
- "Why does this happen? Is it positive or negative?"
مثال واقعی:
"In many countries, young people are leaving rural areas to live in cities. Why is this happening? What problems does this create?"
فرمول نوشتن Two-Part Question Essay
این نوع سوال آسانترین نوع است چون ساختارش مشخص است:
ساختار 4 پاراگرافی:
مقدمه:
- Paraphrase موضوع
- اشاره کوتاه به هر دو سوال
پاراگراف اول بدنه - پاسخ سوال اول:
- دو یا سه پاسخ کامل
- توضیحات و مثالها
پاراگراف دوم بدنه - پاسخ سوال دوم:
- دو یا سه پاسخ کامل
- توضیحات و مثالها
نتیجهگیری:
- خلاصه پاسخ سوال اول
- خلاصه پاسخ سوال دوم
اشتباهات رایج در Two-Part Questions
بزرگترین اشتباه این است که یک سوال را کاملاً فراموش کنید یا فقط یک جمله بهش اختصاص دهید. یادم میآید یک دانشجو 80 درصد مقالهاش را صرف سوال اول کرد و سوال دوم را با یک پاراگراف 30 کلمهای جواب داد. نمره Task Response اش 5.5 شد.
نکات مهم:
- تساوی زمان و فضا: هر سوال باید یک پاراگراف کامل داشته باشد
- عدم آمیختن پاسخها: پاسخ سوال اول و دوم را مخلوط نکنید
- ارتباط منطقی: گاهی دو سوال مرتبط هستند، این ارتباط را نشان دهید
جمعبندی بخش اول
در این بخش، پنج نوع اصلی سوالات تسک 2 را با جزئیات کامل بررسی کردیم. نکته کلیدی این است که قبل از شروع نوشتن، حتماً 2-3 دقیقه وقت بگذارید تا نوع سوال را دقیق تشخیص دهید. این تشخیص درست میتواند تفاوت یک نمره را برای شما ایجاد کند.
در بخش بعدی، 10 نمونه سوال واقعی با فرمولهای دقیق برای هر نوع را بررسی خواهیم کرد و سپس به 10 نمونه مقاله نمره 9 با تحلیل کامل میپردازیم.
نکته نهایی این بخش: هر شب قبل از خواب، یک سوال نمونه بخوانید و فقط نوع آن را تشخیص دهید. این تمرین ساده، مغز شما را برای تشخیص سریع نوع سوالات آماده میکند.
بخش دوم: 10 نمونه سوال واقعی با استراتژی و فرمول کامل
در این بخش، 10 سوال واقعی از آزمونهای اخیر آیلتس را با پلن نوشتاری کامل بررسی میکنیم. هر سوال شامل تشخیص نوع، استراتژی پاسخگویی، و فرمول دقیق جملهبندی است.
[تصویر: تقویم آزمون آیلتس با علامتگذاری روی 10 سوال واقعی و تاریخ آزمونها]
نمونه سوال 1: موضوع محیط زیست (Opinion Essay)
سوال واقعی (آزمون دسامبر 2024):
"Long-distance flights consume large amounts of fuel and pollute the air. Some people think that we should discourage non-essential flights, such as tourist travel, rather than limit the use of cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
گام اول: تحلیل سوال
نوع سوال: Opinion Essay (نظری)
کلمات کلیدی:
- "To what extent do you agree or disagree" → نظر روشن لازم است
- Long-distance flights vs. cars
- Non-essential flights / tourist travel
تلههای این سوال: این سوال مقایسهای است. باید درباره هر دو (پرواز و ماشین) صحبت کنید، نه فقط یکی.
گام دوم: Brainstorming (طوفان فکری - 3 دقیقه)
اگر موافقید (محدود کردن پروازها):
- پروازها آلودگی بیشتری تولید میکنند
- سفرهای تفریحی ضروری نیستند
- ماشینها برای زندگی روزمره لازم هستند
اگر مخالفید:
- صنعت گردشگری مهم است
- باید هر دو را کنترل کنیم
- پروازها کارایی بیشتری دارند برای مسافتهای طولانی
گام سوم: ساختار پیشنهادی (4 پاراگراف)
Introduction (مقدمه - 50 کلمه):
جمله 1 (Paraphrase): Aviation industry has become a significant contributor to environmental
pollution due to massive fuel consumption.
جمله 2 (Your position): While some argue that recreational air travel should be restricted
instead of automobile use, I partially disagree with this view.
جمله 3 (Outline): This essay will examine why both transportation modes require regulation.
Body Paragraph 1 (پاراگراف اول - 100 کلمه):
Topic Sentence: Admittedly, international flights do produce substantial carbon emissions
that contribute to climate change.
Explanation: A single transatlantic flight can release as much CO2 as an average car
produces in an entire year, making aviation a major polluter.
Example: According to research from the Intergovernmental Panel on Climate Change (IPCC),
the aviation sector accounts for approximately 2-3% of global greenhouse gas emissions.
Concluding thought: Therefore, limiting unnecessary leisure travel could help reduce
environmental damage.
Body Paragraph 2 (پاراگراف دوم - 100 کلمه):
Topic Sentence: However, restricting only flights while ignoring automobile emissions
would be an incomplete solution.
Explanation: Cars are used daily by billions of people worldwide, and their cumulative
impact on air quality, especially in urban areas, is enormous.
Example: In my own city of Tehran, vehicle exhaust is the primary cause of smog that
affects millions of residents every day.
Counter-argument acknowledgment: Moreover, tourism provides livelihood for millions
of people globally, and completely discouraging it could have severe economic consequences.
Concluding thought: Thus, a balanced approach targeting both sectors is more logical.
Conclusion (نتیجهگیری - 50 کلمه):
In conclusion, while I acknowledge that air travel contributes significantly to pollution,
I believe that focusing solely on flights while overlooking cars would be shortsighted.
Both industries need sustainable alternatives, such as electric vehicles and cleaner
aviation fuels, to effectively combat environmental degradation.
نکات طلایی برای این نوع سوال:
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جملات Paraphrase برای مقدمه:
- "consume fuel" → "fuel consumption" / "energy usage"
- "pollute the air" → "contribute to air pollution" / "environmental damage"
- "discourage" → "restrict" / "limit" / "reduce"
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Linking Words مناسب:
- برای توافق جزئی: "While I accept that..., I believe that..."
- برای مخالفت: "However", "Nevertheless", "On the contrary"
- برای نتیجهگیری: "Therefore", "Thus", "Consequently"
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واژگان تخصصی محیط زیست:
- carbon footprint, greenhouse gases, sustainable alternatives
- climate change, environmental degradation, emission reduction
- renewable energy, carbon offset, ecological impact
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نمونه سوال 2: موضوع آموزش (Discussion Essay)
سوال واقعی (آزمون نوامبر 2024):
"Some people think that the best way to succeed is to get a university education, while others disagree and say that it is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your own opinion."
تحلیل سوال
نوع: Discussion Essay
Task: بررسی هر دو دیدگاه + نظر شخصی
ساختار پیشنهادی
Introduction:
Paraphrase: The role of higher education in achieving success has become a topic of debate.
Both views: While some individuals believe university degrees are essential for career
advancement, others argue that alternative paths are equally valuable in today's world.
Your stance: This essay will discuss both perspectives before explaining why I believe
a balanced approach is most beneficial.
Body Paragraph 1 - دیدگاه اول (تحصیلات دانشگاهی مهم است):
Main point: University education provides specialized knowledge and credentials that
many professions require.
Example: In fields such as medicine, engineering, and law, formal qualifications are
not just beneficial but legally mandatory.
Personal observation: I have seen many of my classmates who, after obtaining their
degrees, secured stable positions in their chosen careers much faster than those without
formal education.
Analysis: Additionally, universities offer networking opportunities and structured
learning environments that can be difficult to replicate independently.
Body Paragraph 2 - دیدگاه دوم (مسیرهای جایگزین):
Main point: However, the digital age has created numerous success stories of individuals
who achieved prosperity without university degrees.
Example: Entrepreneurs like Mark Zuckerberg and Bill Gates famously dropped out of
university yet built billion-dollar companies.
Current trend: Furthermore, online courses, vocational training, and apprenticeships
now provide practical skills that are often more relevant to current job markets than
traditional degrees.
Analysis: Many employers today value experience and demonstrable skills over academic
credentials alone.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, both university education and alternative pathways have their merits.
While formal education remains important for certain professions, I believe that success
in the modern world depends more on adaptability, continuous learning, and practical
skills rather than degrees alone.
فرمولهای جملهسازی Discussion Essay:
برای ارائه دیدگاه اول:
- "Proponents of X argue that..."
- "Those who support X believe that..."
- "From one perspective, ..."
برای ارائه دیدگاه دوم:
- "On the other hand, ..."
- "Conversely, opponents claim that..."
- "An alternative viewpoint suggests that..."
برای بیان نظر خود:
- "In my view, ..."
- "I am inclined to believe that..."
- "Personally, I think that..."
نمونه سوال 3: موضوع فناوری (Problem-Solution)
سوال واقعی (آزمون دسامبر 2024):
"Nowadays, more and more people want to get things done instantly (such as services, information, and tasks). Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?"
تحلیل سوال
نوع: Two-Part Question
قسمت اول: چرا؟ (علل)
قسمت دوم: مثبت یا منفی؟ (ارزیابی)
ساختار پیشنهادی
Introduction:
Background: In today's fast-paced society, there is an increasing demand for immediate
gratification in nearly every aspect of life.
Two-part acknowledgment: This essay will explore the reasons behind this trend and
argue that while it offers certain benefits, the negative implications are more significant.
Body Paragraph 1 - علل (Why):
Reason 1: The primary driver of this phenomenon is technological advancement, particularly
smartphones and high-speed internet.
Example: Applications like food delivery services, instant messaging, and streaming
platforms have conditioned people to expect immediate results.
Reason 2: Additionally, modern work culture emphasizes efficiency and productivity,
creating pressure to accomplish tasks quickly.
Personal insight: In my own workplace, I have noticed how colleagues become frustrated
if an email response takes more than a few hours, reflecting this shift in expectations.
Body Paragraph 2 - ارزیابی (Positive or Negative):
Positive aspect: Admittedly, instant access to services and information has improved
convenience and saved valuable time.
Negative aspects (main focus): However, this desire for immediacy has several drawbacks.
Point 1: First, it has reduced people's patience and ability to focus on long-term goals.
Point 2: Second, the constant need for instant gratification can lead to stress and
anxiety when delays occur.
Example: Research published in the Journal of Consumer Psychology indicates that people
who constantly seek instant results report higher levels of dissatisfaction with their
daily lives.
Concluding sentence: Therefore, I believe this is predominantly a negative development
that affects mental well-being.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, the trend toward instant gratification stems from technological progress
and workplace demands. While it offers undeniable convenience, I believe the psychological
costs and erosion of patience make it a concerning development for society.
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نمونه سوال 4: موضوع اجتماعی (Advantages-Disadvantages)
سوال واقعی (آزمون اکتبر 2024):
"More and more people today are moving away from where their friends and family live. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?"
تحلیل سوال
نوع: Advantages-Disadvantages (با نظر)
کلید: "outweigh" → باید نظر بدهید کدام بیشتر است
Brainstorming
مزایا:
- فرصتهای شغلی بهتر
- تجربه زندگی در مکانهای جدید
- استقلال شخصی
معایب:
- دوری از عزیزان
- احساس تنهایی
- از دست دادن شبکه حمایتی
ساختار پیشنهادی (نظر: معایب بیشتر است)
Introduction:
Trend description: Geographic mobility has become increasingly common in contemporary
society, with many individuals relocating far from their hometowns.
Your clear position: While this trend offers certain career and personal growth
opportunities, I believe the emotional and social disadvantages outweigh the benefits.
Body Paragraph 1 - مزایا (کوتاهتر - 80 کلمه):
Main advantage: Relocating to different cities or countries can provide access to
better career prospects and higher salaries.
Example: Many professionals from developing nations move to metropolitan areas where
their skills are better compensated.
Secondary benefit: Additionally, living independently away from family can foster
maturity and self-reliance.
Body Paragraph 2 - معایب (طولانیتر - 120 کلمه):
Main disadvantage: However, the emotional cost of separation from loved ones can be
substantial.
Personal example: When I moved to another city for university, I experienced profound
loneliness, especially during difficult times when I needed family support.
Psychological impact: Research from the American Psychological Association shows that
people living far from their support networks report higher rates of depression and
anxiety.
Social aspect: Furthermore, children who grow up away from extended family miss valuable
relationships with grandparents and cousins, which can affect their sense of identity
and belonging.
Long-term consequence: These emotional wounds can persist for years and impact overall
life satisfaction despite financial success.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, although relocating away from family can advance careers and build
independence, I firmly believe the disadvantages, particularly the emotional toll and
loss of social support, outweigh these benefits. Strong family connections contribute
more to long-term happiness than professional advancement alone.
نمونه سوال 5: موضوع رسانه (Opinion Essay)
سوال واقعی (آزمون نوامبر 2024):
"In some countries, celebrities complain about the way the media publicizes their private lives. Some people say that they should accept it as part of their fame. Do you agree or disagree?"
تحلیل و ساختار
نوع: Opinion Essay
موضع پیشنهادی: Partially agree (توافق جزئی)
Introduction:
Issue: The relationship between celebrity privacy and media coverage has long been
contentious.
Your position: While I accept that public figures should expect some media attention,
I disagree that they must tolerate intrusive coverage of their private lives.
Body Paragraph 1 - چرا باید بپذیرند:
Argument: Public figures benefit financially and socially from their fame, which
necessitates some loss of privacy.
Reasoning: Celebrities actively cultivate public interest through social media and
publicity campaigns, making it inconsistent to then demand complete privacy.
Example: Actors attend award ceremonies and give interviews precisely to maintain their
public image and marketability.
Body Paragraph 2 - چرا حق دارند شکایت کنند:
Counter-argument: However, there is a critical distinction between professional exposure
and invasive intrusion into personal matters.
Privacy rights: Everyone, regardless of fame, deserves basic privacy rights, especially
concerning their families and health.
Example: When photographers chase celebrities' children or publish unauthorized photos
of private family moments, they cross ethical boundaries.
Consequence: Such harassment can lead to mental health issues, as evidenced by numerous
cases of celebrities suffering from anxiety and depression.
Balanced view: Media should focus on celebrities' professional work rather than
exploiting their personal struggles for profit.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, while fame involves some public scrutiny, I believe celebrities have
every right to complain about excessive media intrusion. A balance must be struck
between public interest and fundamental privacy rights.
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نمونه سوال 6: موضوع سلامت (Problem-Solution)
سوال واقعی (آزمون سپتامبر 2024):
"Traffic congestion is becoming a serious problem in many cities. What are the causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?"
ساختار کامل
Introduction:
Issue: Urban traffic congestion has reached crisis levels in numerous metropolitan areas
worldwide.
Overview: This essay will examine the primary causes of this problem and propose
practical solutions.
Body Paragraph 1 - علل:
Cause 1: The main reason is rapid urbanization combined with inadequate infrastructure
development.
Explanation: As populations concentrate in cities, existing road networks cannot
accommodate the increased vehicle numbers.
Example: In Bangkok, the population has doubled over 30 years, but road capacity has
increased by less than 20%.
Cause 2: Additionally, insufficient public transportation forces people to rely on
private vehicles.
Personal observation: In my city, unreliable bus schedules and overcrowded trains leave
commuters with no choice but to drive.
Body Paragraph 2 - راهحلها:
Solution 1: Governments should invest heavily in expanding and improving public transit
systems.
Implementation: This includes building metro lines, dedicated bus lanes, and integrated
ticketing systems.
Example: Cities like Singapore and Tokyo have successfully reduced congestion through
comprehensive public transportation networks.
Solution 2: Implementing congestion pricing could discourage unnecessary car use during
peak hours.
Explanation: Charging fees to enter city centers during busy times has proven effective
in London, where traffic decreased by 30% after introduction.
Long-term approach: Furthermore, promoting remote work and flexible hours can distribute
traffic flow throughout the day.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, traffic congestion results primarily from population growth and poor
public transport. Expanding transit infrastructure and implementing smart pricing
strategies are essential steps toward resolving this urban challenge.
نمونه سوال 7: موضوع کار (Two-Part Question)
سوال واقعی (ژانویه 2024):
"An increasing number of people are changing careers during their working life. What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development for society?"
فرمول Two-Part
Introduction:
Trend: Career switching has become increasingly common in modern workforce.
Both questions: This essay will explore the factors driving this trend and evaluate
its implications for society.
Body Paragraph 1 - دلایل:
Reason 1: Technological advancements have created new industries while making others
obsolete.
Example: Many workers in traditional manufacturing have retrained for roles in IT and
digital services.
Reason 2: People prioritize job satisfaction and work-life balance more than previous
generations.
Personal insight: Several of my friends left stable but unfulfilling jobs to pursue
careers aligned with their passions.
Reason 3: Economic instability and company restructuring force involuntary career changes.
Body Paragraph 2 - ارزیابی:
Positive aspects: This flexibility can lead to increased job satisfaction and better
skill utilization across the economy.
Benefit to individuals: People who switch careers often report feeling more engaged
and motivated in their work.
Negative aspects: However, frequent career changes can create skills gaps and training
costs for employers.
Social concern: Additionally, older workers may struggle with transitions, leading to
unemployment and financial insecurity.
Balanced conclusion: Despite challenges, I view this as predominantly positive because
it reflects greater individual autonomy and adaptation to changing economic conditions.
نمونه سوال 8: موضوع فرهنگ (Discussion Essay)
سوال واقعی (نوامبر 2024):
"In some countries, marriages are arranged by parents, while in others, people choose their own partners. Discuss both systems and state which you think is better."
ساختار Discussion
Introduction:
Context: Marriage practices vary significantly across cultures worldwide.
Both systems: This essay will examine both arranged marriages and love marriages before
arguing that choice-based marriages are generally more suitable for modern society.
Body Paragraph 1 - ازدواج سنتی:
Cultural perspective: In arranged marriages, families carefully select partners based
on compatibility, social status, and shared values.
Advantages: Proponents argue this approach leads to more stable unions because families
consider practical factors beyond romantic attraction.
Example: In countries like India, arranged marriages historically had lower divorce
rates compared to Western nations.
Community benefit: These marriages strengthen family bonds and preserve cultural traditions.
Body Paragraph 2 - ازدواج انتخابی:
Modern approach: Conversely, self-chosen marriages prioritize individual happiness and
personal compatibility.
Advantages: Couples who choose each other based on genuine affection and mutual
understanding may experience deeper emotional connections.
Freedom aspect: Moreover, personal choice respects individual autonomy and human rights.
My position: I believe this system is preferable because forcing marriage, even with
good intentions, can lead to resentment and unhappiness.
Example: I have witnessed arranged marriages where partners remained together out of
social obligation rather than love, resulting in unfulfilling lives.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, while arranged marriages offer cultural continuity and family support,
I believe marriages based on personal choice better align with contemporary values of
individual freedom and happiness.
نمونه سوال 9: موضوع کودکان (Advantages-Disadvantages)
سوال واقعی (دسامبر 2024):
"Some people think that children should start school at a very early age, while others believe they should not start until they are seven years old. Discuss both views and give your opinion."
ساختار Discussion + Opinion
Introduction:
Educational debate: The optimal age for beginning formal education remains controversial.
Both views + stance: While early schooling offers certain cognitive benefits, I believe
waiting until age seven provides children with better emotional preparation.
Body Paragraph 1 - مدرسه زودهنگام:
Argument for early start: Early education advocates claim that young children's brains
are highly receptive to learning.
Cognitive benefit: Exposing children to structured learning at age 3-4 can accelerate
literacy and numeracy skills.
Example: Many successful educational systems in Finland and Singapore begin formal
instruction early with impressive results.
Socialization: Additionally, schools provide social interaction opportunities crucial
for development.
Body Paragraph 2 - شروع دیرتر:
Counter-argument: However, starting school at seven allows children more time for
play-based learning and emotional development.
Psychological research: According to child development studies, excessive academic
pressure at young ages can cause stress and diminish natural curiosity.
Personal observation: I have seen young children who attended preschool at three
struggling with anxiety, while those who started later appeared more confident and engaged.
Play importance: Unstructured play is essential for creativity, problem-solving, and
social skills that formal education cannot replicate.
My position: Therefore, I support later school entry, allowing childhood to focus on
exploration rather than academic achievement.
نمونه سوال 10: موضوع حیوانات (Opinion Essay)
سوال واقعی (دسامبر 2024):
"In the modern world, using animals for food or animal products, such as clothing and medicines, is no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
ساختار Opinion
Introduction:
Contemporary debate: Animal use in human society has become increasingly controversial.
Your position: While I acknowledge that alternatives exist, I disagree that animal
products are completely unnecessary in today's world.
Body Paragraph 1 - چرا هنوز ضروری هستند:
Nutritional argument: Animal products provide essential nutrients that are difficult
to obtain from plant-based sources alone.
Example: Vitamin B12, crucial for neurological function, occurs naturally only in
animal products, and while supplements exist, they are not accessible or affordable
everywhere.
Medical necessity: Furthermore, many life-saving medicines still rely on animal-derived
ingredients or testing.
Global perspective: In developing nations, livestock remains essential for both
nutrition and livelihood.
Body Paragraph 2 - چرا باید کاهش یابد:
Acknowledgment: That said, I agree that in affluent societies, animal use should be
significantly reduced.
Environmental concern: Industrial animal farming contributes massively to greenhouse
gas emissions and deforestation.
Ethical consideration: Modern factory farming practices raise serious ethical questions
about animal welfare.
Balanced approach: Rather than complete elimination, we should promote sustainable
practices, reduce consumption, and develop better alternatives.
Conclusion:
In conclusion, while animal products remain necessary for many communities worldwide,
developed nations should substantially decrease their reliance on animal agriculture
through conscious consumption and investment in alternatives.
فرمولهای کاربردی برای همه انواع سوالات
فرمولهای Introduction:
-
برای Opinion Essays:
- "While some people believe X, I strongly agree/disagree because..."
- "Although X is a common viewpoint, I think that..."
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برای Discussion Essays:
- "There are valid arguments on both sides of this debate..."
- "This issue has divided opinion, with compelling points on each side..."
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برای Problem-Solution:
- "X has become a pressing concern in modern society..."
- "This essay will examine the root causes of X and propose viable solutions..."
فرمولهای Body Paragraphs:
Topic Sentences:
- "The primary reason for X is..."
- "One significant advantage/disadvantage is..."
- "From one perspective, ..."
Adding Examples:
- "For instance, ..."
- "A clear example of this is..."
- "This is evident in..."
- "In my own experience, ..."
Adding Explanation:
- "This means that..."
- "In other words, ..."
- "As a result of this, ..."
Counter-arguments:
- "However, it must be acknowledged that..."
- "Admittedly, ..."
- "That said, ..."
فرمولهای Conclusion:
- "In conclusion, while X offers certain benefits, I believe..."
- "To summarize, the advantages/disadvantages of X clearly outweigh..."
- "Overall, I maintain that..."
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نکات طلایی برای مدیریت زمان 40 دقیقه
یکی از دانشجوهایم، کیمیا، همیشه 300 کلمه مینوشت اما در زمان مقرر تمام نمیکرد. بعد از اینکه این استراتژی زمانبندی را یاد گرفت، نمرهاش از 6 به 7.5 رسید.
تقسیمبندی زمان استاندارد:
دقیقه 0-3: تحلیل سوال و Brainstorming
- نوع سوال را تشخیص دهید
- کلمات کلیدی را مشخص کنید
- 2-3 ایده اصلی بنویسید
دقیقه 3-5: Planning (پلننویسی)
- ساختار 4 پاراگراف را بنویسید
- Topic sentence هر پاراگراف را یادداشت کنید
- مثالهایتان را مشخص کنید
دقیقه 5-35: نوشتن (Writing)
- مقدمه: 5 دقیقه (50 کلمه)
- پاراگراف اول: 10 دقیقه (100 کلمه)
- پاراگراف دوم: 10 دقیقه (100 کلمه)
- نتیجهگیری: 5 دقیقه (50 کلمه)
دقیقه 35-40: ویرایش و بررسی
- املا و گرامر را چک کنید
- تعداد کلمات را بشمارید (حداقل 250)
- linking words را بررسی کنید
جمعبندی بخش دوم
در این بخش، 10 سوال واقعی از آزمونهای اخیر را با پلن کامل، استراتژی نوشتن، و فرمولهای جملهبندی بررسی کردیم. نکته کلیدی این است که:
- همیشه 3-5 دقیقه برای تحلیل و پلننویسی بگذارید
- از فرمولهای آماده برای سرعت بخشیدن استفاده کنید
- مثالهای شخصی و واقعی قانعکنندهتر هستند
- مدیریت زمان مهمتر از نوشتن مقاله طولانی است
در بخش سوم، 10 نمونه مقاله نمره 9 با تحلیل کامل خواهیم دید تا بفهمیم چه چیزی یک مقاله را عالی میکند.
بخش سوم: 10 نمونه مقاله نمره 9 با تحلیل کامل
در این بخش، 10 مقاله نمره 9 واقعی را با تحلیل دقیق بررسی میکنیم. هر مقاله شامل تحلیل چهار معیار اصلی (Task Response, Coherence and Cohesion, Lexical Resource, Grammatical Range and Accuracy) است.
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نمونه مقاله 1: موضوع شبکههای اجتماعی (Opinion Essay)
سوال:
"Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: Social networking sites, for instance Facebook, are thought by some to have had a detrimental effect on individual people as well as society and local communities. However, while I believe that such sites are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that they have had a damaging effect on local communities.
Body Paragraph 1: With regards to individuals, the impact that online social media has had on each individual person has clear advantages. Firstly, people from different countries are brought together through such sites as Facebook whereas before the development of technology and social networking sites, people rarely had the chance to meet or communicate with anyone outside of their immediate circle or community. Secondly, Facebook also has social groups which offer individuals a chance to meet and participate in discussions with people who share common interests.
Body Paragraph 2: On the other hand, society as a whole has been negatively impacted by this phenomenon. Rather than individual people taking part in their local community, they are instead choosing to take more interest in people online. Consequently, the people within local communities are no longer forming close or meaningful bonds. Furthermore, society as a whole is becoming increasingly disconnected as people are spending more time online and less time face-to-face with their peers. As a result, isolation amongst the elderly and vulnerable in our communities is becoming more prevalent.
Conclusion: In conclusion, although social networking sites have brought individuals closer together, they have not had the same effect on society or local communities. This is because local communities should do more to try and involve individuals in local activities in order to promote the future of community life.
تعداد کلمات: 280
تحلیل جامع نمره 9:
✅ Task Response (9/9)
چرا نمره کامل گرفت:
- پاسخ کامل به سوال: نویسنده هم درباره افراد و هم درباره جامعه صحبت کرده
- موضع روشن و ثابت: "beneficial to individuals but damaging to communities"
- توسعه کامل ایدهها با مثالهای مرتبط
- پاراگرافبندی منطقی و متوازن
درسهای کلیدی: نویسنده از همان مقدمه موضع خود را روشن کرده: "while I believe... I agree that...". این وضوح در کل مقاله حفظ شده است.
✅ Coherence and Cohesion (9/9)
نکات برجسته:
Linking Words استفاده شده:
- However, Firstly, Secondly (برای ساختاردهی)
- On the other hand (برای کنتراست)
- Consequently, Furthermore, As a result (برای نتیجهگیری)
- Although (برای نتیجه)
جریان منطقی: هر پاراگراف یک ایده مرکزی دارد و جملات به طور طبیعی به هم متصل شدهاند.
Reference Words:
- "such sites" → اشاره به social networking sites
- "this phenomenon" → اشاره به استفاده از شبکههای اجتماعی
- "they" → اشاره منسجم به افراد
✅ Lexical Resource (9/9)
واژگان پیشرفته استفاده شده:
| عبارت معمولی | عبارت پیشرفته در مقاله |
|---|---|
| bad effect | detrimental effect |
| good things | clear advantages |
| talk with | communicate with |
| nearby area | immediate circle |
| happening | phenomenon |
| alone people | isolation amongst the elderly |
| happening more | becoming more prevalent |
Collocations طبیعی:
- "damaging effect on"
- "brought together through"
- "share common interests"
- "meaningful bonds"
- "increasingly disconnected"
پرهیز از تکرار: توجه کنید نویسنده برای "social networking sites" از مترادفهای مختلف استفاده کرده: "such sites", "online social media", "Facebook".
✅ Grammatical Range and Accuracy (9/9)
ساختارهای پیچیده:
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Complex sentences با while:
- "while I believe that such sites are mainly beneficial to the individual, I agree that..."
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Passive voice:
- "are thought by some to have had"
- "are brought together through"
- "society as a whole has been negatively impacted"
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Relative clauses:
- "people who share common interests"
- "discussions with people who share..."
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Gerund structures:
- "Rather than individual people taking part..."
- "people are spending more time online"
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Conditional structures:
- استفاده از "should" برای پیشنهاد
دقت گرامری: هیچ خطای گرامری وجود ندارد. تمام جملات ساختار صحیح دارند.
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نمونه مقاله 2: موضوع آموزش (Discussion Essay)
سوال:
"Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: What universities should offer to students is a debatable issue. While some argue that the primary purpose of tertiary education is to equip students with practical skills for employment, I believe that higher education institutions should prioritize intellectual development and theoretical knowledge.
Body Paragraph 1: Those who advocate for career-oriented education have valid concerns. In today's competitive job market, employers increasingly seek graduates with immediately applicable skills. Universities that integrate internships, industry partnerships, and vocational training into their curricula better prepare students for professional success. For instance, engineering programs that include hands-on laboratory experience produce graduates who can contribute to their employers from day one. Moreover, when students acquire marketable skills, they secure employment more quickly, reducing both personal financial burden and societal unemployment rates.
Body Paragraph 2: However, I am convinced that universities serve a higher purpose beyond mere job preparation. Academic institutions have historically been centers of intellectual inquiry, pushing the boundaries of human knowledge through research and critical thinking. When universities focus exclusively on practical skills, they risk becoming vocational schools, abandoning their fundamental role in advancing civilization. A chemistry student, for example, benefits more from understanding theoretical principles than from memorizing workplace procedures, as these foundational concepts enable innovation and adaptation throughout their career. Furthermore, many breakthrough discoveries have emerged from pure research conducted without immediate commercial application in mind.
Body Paragraph 3: Additionally, the rapidly evolving nature of modern careers makes specific skill-training potentially obsolete. The World Economic Forum reports that many current students will work in jobs that do not yet exist, using technologies not yet invented. Therefore, universities should cultivate adaptability, analytical thinking, and lifelong learning capabilities rather than narrow technical competencies. My own experience supports this view. During my undergraduate studies, the critical thinking skills I developed through philosophical debates proved far more valuable in my varied career than any specific software training I received.
Conclusion: In conclusion, while practical skills have their place in higher education, I firmly believe universities should maintain their commitment to intellectual development and theoretical knowledge. This approach better serves both individual students and society by fostering innovation, critical thinking, and the advancement of human understanding.
تعداد کلمات: 365
تحلیل نمره 9:
✅ Task Response (9/9)
نکات برجسته:
- پاسخ به هر دو دیدگاه با عمق کافی
- نظر شخصی واضح: "I believe universities should prioritize intellectual development"
- توسعه عالی با مثالهای واقعی (World Economic Forum, personal experience)
- طول مناسب (365 کلمه) برای توسعه کامل ایدهها
ساختار استثنایی: این مقاله از ساختار 5 پاراگرافی استفاده کرده که برای مقالات پیچیدهتر مناسب است.
✅ Coherence and Cohesion (9/9)
Paragraph Progression:
- Para 1: Introduction + thesis
- Para 2: دیدگاه مخالف (کوتاهتر)
- Para 3: دیدگاه خود (اصلی)
- Para 4: دلیل اضافی قوی
- Para 5: Conclusion
Cohesive Devices پیشرفته:
- "While some argue... I believe..." (کنتراست)
- "However, I am convinced..." (مخالفت قوی)
- "Moreover" / "Furthermore" (اضافه کردن)
- "Additionally" (دلیل اضافی)
- "Therefore" (نتیجهگیری منطقی)
✅ Lexical Resource (9/9)
واژگان آکادمیک عالی:
- "debatable issue" نه "controversial topic"
- "equip students with" نه "give students"
- "tertiary education" نه "university education"
- "advocate for" نه "support"
- "vocational training" نه "job training"
- "intellectual inquiry" نه "thinking"
- "pushing the boundaries" (اصطلاح پیشرفته)
- "obsolete" نه "old"
- "cultivate adaptability" نه "develop flexibility"
Topic-Specific Vocabulary:
- industry partnerships
- hands-on laboratory experience
- marketable skills
- intellectual inquiry
- pure research
- breakthrough discoveries
- analytical thinking
- lifelong learning capabilities
✅ Grammatical Range and Accuracy (9/9)
ساختارهای پیچیده متنوع:
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Reduced relative clauses:
- "Universities that integrate internships..."
- "students who acquire marketable skills..."
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Participle clauses:
- "reducing both personal financial burden..."
- "using technologies not yet invented"
-
Inversion:
- "When universities focus exclusively on..."
-
Conditional structures:
- "they risk becoming vocational schools"
-
Complex noun phrases:
- "the rapidly evolving nature of modern careers"
- "lifelong learning capabilities"
تنوع زمانها:
- Present Simple: "universities serve"
- Present Perfect: "have emerged"
- Future: "will work"
- Modal verbs: "should cultivate", "can contribute"
نمونه مقاله 3: موضوع محیط زیست (Problem-Solution)
سوال:
"Global warming is one of the most serious issues facing the world today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: Climate change represents perhaps humanity's greatest existential threat. This essay will examine the primary causes of global warming and propose both governmental and individual solutions to address this crisis.
Body Paragraph 1 - Causes: The main driver of global warming is greenhouse gas emissions, predominantly from burning fossil fuels for energy production, transportation, and industry. Coal-fired power plants, for example, release enormous quantities of carbon dioxide into the atmosphere, trapping heat and raising global temperatures. Deforestation compounds this problem by eliminating trees that would otherwise absorb CO2. Additionally, industrial agriculture, particularly livestock farming, produces significant methane emissions. In my region, I have witnessed forests being cleared for cattle ranching, contributing directly to both carbon release and methane production.
Body Paragraph 2 - Government Solutions: Governments must lead the response through comprehensive policy interventions. Firstly, they should mandate a transition to renewable energy sources by subsidizing solar and wind power while simultaneously taxing carbon emissions. Countries like Denmark have demonstrated this approach's effectiveness, generating over 40 percent of their electricity from wind. Secondly, governments must enforce stricter environmental regulations on industries, requiring factories to adopt cleaner technologies or face substantial penalties. Finally, investing in public transportation infrastructure reduces individual car dependency, as cities like Copenhagen have proven through their extensive cycling networks.
Body Paragraph 3 - Individual Solutions: Individuals also bear responsibility for addressing climate change through lifestyle modifications. Reducing meat consumption significantly lowers one's carbon footprint, as producing beef requires vastly more resources than plant-based alternatives. Furthermore, people should prioritize energy conservation by improving home insulation, using energy-efficient appliances, and minimizing air conditioning usage. When I installed solar panels on my house and switched to cycling for short journeys, my household carbon emissions decreased by approximately 30 percent. Small individual actions, when multiplied across millions of people, create substantial collective impact.
Conclusion: In conclusion, global warming stems primarily from fossil fuel consumption and deforestation. While governments must implement policy changes and infrastructure improvements, individual lifestyle changes are equally crucial. Only through combined action at all levels can humanity hope to mitigate this existential threat.
تعداد کلمات: 345
تحلیل نمره 9:
✅ Task Response (9/9)
پاسخ جامع:
- Causes: fossil fuels, deforestation, agriculture ✓
- Government solutions: renewable energy, regulations, infrastructure ✓
- Individual solutions: diet, energy conservation, transportation ✓
- مثالهای شخصی واقعی (solar panels, cycling)
عمق تحلیل: نویسنده فقط راهحلها را لیست نکرده، بلکه توضیح داده چرا کار میکنند (مثلاً Denmark با 40% انرژی بادی).
✅ Coherence and Cohesion (9/9)
ساختار منطقی 3 بخشی: مقاله به وضوح به causes (پاراگراف 1) و solutions (پاراگراف 2 و 3) تقسیم شده.
Sequencing words:
- "Firstly", "Secondly", "Finally" در پاراگراف دولتی
- "Furthermore", "Additionally" برای اضافه کردن نکات
- "When I..." برای مثال شخصی
✅ Lexical Resource (9/9)
واژگان تخصصی محیط زیست:
- existential threat
- greenhouse gas emissions
- fossil fuels
- carbon dioxide
- deforestation
- compounds this problem
- methane emissions
- carbon footprint
- energy conservation
- home insulation
- collective impact
- mitigate
Collocations محیطزیستی:
- "burning fossil fuels"
- "release carbon dioxide"
- "trap heat"
- "raise global temperatures"
- "renewable energy sources"
- "carbon emissions"
- "cleaner technologies"
- "substantial penalties"
- "energy-efficient appliances"
![[تصویر: ابر کلمات (Word Cloud) شامل واژگان محیطزیستی استفاده شده در مقاله]](/media/uploads/ermes/2025/12/21/1.jpg)
✅ Grammatical Range and Accuracy (9/9)
تنوع گرامری:
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Participle phrases:
- "eliminating trees that would..."
- "requiring factories to adopt..."
- "generating over 40 percent..."
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Conditional structures:
- "trees that would otherwise absorb CO2"
- "Only through combined action can humanity hope..."
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Comparatives:
- "vastly more resources than"
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Perfect tenses:
- "have demonstrated"
- "have proven"
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Modal verbs:
- "must lead", "should mandate", "can humanity hope"
نمونه مقاله 4: موضوع تکنولوژی (Advantages-Disadvantages)
سوال:
"Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: International and domestic travel have experienced unprecedented growth in recent decades. This essay will explore the reasons behind this trend and examine the advantages that travel offers to individuals.
Body Paragraph 1 - Reasons: Several factors explain the surge in global travel. Primarily, air travel has become significantly more affordable due to budget airlines and increased competition in the aviation industry. Whereas a transatlantic flight once cost several months' salary, it is now accessible to middle-class families. Additionally, globalization has created more international business opportunities, necessitating frequent travel for work purposes. The rise of social media has also fueled wanderlust, as people constantly view attractive travel photographs from friends and influencers, inspiring them to explore new destinations themselves.
Body Paragraph 2 - Benefits: Travellers gain numerous personal benefits from their journeys. First and foremost, exposure to different cultures broadens perspectives and challenges preconceived notions. When I visited Japan, witnessing their respectful social customs fundamentally changed my understanding of courtesy and community. Furthermore, travel develops valuable skills including adaptability, problem-solving, and independence. Navigating unfamiliar cities, communicating across language barriers, and handling unexpected situations builds confidence that extends beyond the trip itself. Additionally, travel provides mental health benefits by offering escape from daily routines and reducing stress. Research from Cornell University indicates that even anticipating a trip generates happiness comparable to the journey itself.
Conclusion: In conclusion, increased travel results from lower costs, globalization, and social media influence. Travellers benefit through cultural understanding, personal skill development, and improved wellbeing, making travel an enriching experience that contributes to personal growth.
تعداد کلمات: 270
تحلیل نمره 9:
Task Response: 9/9
- پاسخ کامل به هر دو سوال: Why + Benefits ✓
- مثال شخصی قانعکننده (تجربه ژاپن) ✓
- استناد به تحقیقات (Cornell University) ✓
Coherence and Cohesion: 9/9
Paragraph breaks منطقی:
- Para 1: Reasons (چرا)
- Para 2: Benefits (مزایا)
Signposting واضح:
- "Primarily", "Additionally", "also" (برای reasons)
- "First and foremost", "Furthermore", "Additionally" (برای benefits)
Lexical Resource: 9/9
Less common vocabulary:
- unprecedented growth
- surge in global travel
- budget airlines
- necessitating frequent travel
- fueled wanderlust
- preconceived notions
- language barriers
- extends beyond
Academic style:
- "Whereas X, it is now Y" (مقایسه رسمی)
- "Research indicates that..." (ارجاع آکادمیک)
Grammatical Range: 9/9
- Passive voice: "has become significantly more affordable"
- Gerunds: "Navigating unfamiliar cities", "communicating across"
- Participles: "including adaptability", "witnessing their customs"
نمونه مقاله 5: موضوع سلامت (Opinion Essay)
سوال:
"Prevention is better than cure. Out of a country's health budget, a large proportion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventative measures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: Healthcare funding allocation remains a contentious policy issue globally. While treatment services are undeniably essential, I strongly agree that governments should prioritize preventative healthcare and education, as this approach offers superior long-term benefits for both individuals and society.
Body Paragraph 1: Investing in prevention yields substantial economic advantages. Chronic diseases such as diabetes and heart disease, which consume enormous healthcare resources, are largely preventable through lifestyle modifications. Research published in The Lancet demonstrates that every dollar spent on preventative programs saves approximately seven dollars in future treatment costs. For instance, anti-smoking campaigns in Australia reduced smoking rates by 25 percent over two decades, preventing countless cases of lung cancer and respiratory diseases that would have required expensive interventions. Furthermore, preventative healthcare reduces workplace absenteeism and maintains a healthier, more productive workforce, benefiting the economy broadly.
Body Paragraph 2: Beyond economics, prevention enhances quality of life more effectively than treatment. People who maintain good health through proper nutrition, regular exercise, and routine screenings avoid not only medical expenses but also the physical suffering and emotional distress associated with serious illnesses. Having watched my uncle undergo chemotherapy for preventable colon cancer, I witnessed firsthand how devastating such experiences can be for patients and families. Regular colonoscopies, which he had avoided, would have detected the problem early when treatment is far less invasive and more successful. This personal tragedy exemplifies why education about preventative measures matters profoundly.
Body Paragraph 3: Admittedly, treatment services require adequate funding to care for those already ill. However, the current imbalance, where most healthcare budgets fund reactive treatment rather than proactive prevention, is unsustainable. Shifting emphasis toward prevention does not mean abandoning treatment but rather reducing future treatment needs through wiser upstream investment.
Conclusion: In conclusion, I firmly believe that prevention should receive greater priority in healthcare funding because it is more cost-effective, improves quality of life, and reduces overall disease burden. While treatment remains necessary, prevention offers the most promising path toward healthier populations and sustainable healthcare systems.
تعداد کلمات: 345
تحلیل نمره 9:
Task Response: 9/9
نکات برجسته:
- موضع قوی و واضح: "I strongly agree"
- توسعه کامل با 3 body paragraphs
- مثال شخصی احساسی (عموی نویسنده)
- استناد به منابع معتبر (The Lancet, Australian statistics)
- پاسخ به counter-argument (پاراگراف 3)
چرا این مهم است: بهترین مقالات نه تنها موافقت/مخالفت میکنند بلکه به احتمالی counter-arguments هم اشاره میکنند.
Coherence and Cohesion: 9/9
ساختار منطقی:
- Para 1: Economic benefits
- Para 2: Quality of life benefits
- Para 3: Counter-argument + response
- Conclusion: Summary
Cohesive devices پیشرفته:
- "Beyond economics" (گذار به موضوع جدید)
- "Furthermore" (اضافه کردن)
- "Admittedly" (پذیرش counter-argument)
- "However" (کنتراست)
Lexical Resource: 9/9
واژگان پزشکی/سلامت:
- healthcare funding allocation
- preventative healthcare
- chronic diseases
- lifestyle modifications
- respiratory diseases
- workplace absenteeism
- routine screenings
- chemotherapy
- colonoscopies
- invasive treatment
- disease burden
Academic collocations:
- "yields substantial advantages"
- "consume enormous resources"
- "largely preventable"
- "reducing workplace absenteeism"
- "detected the problem early"
- "unsustainable approach"
- "upstream investment"
Grammatical Range: 9/9
ساختارهای پیچیده متنوع:
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Non-defining relative clauses:
- "Chronic diseases..., which consume enormous healthcare resources, are..."
- "Regular colonoscopies, which he had avoided, would have..."
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Reduced relative clauses:
- "Research published in The Lancet"
- "the physical suffering... associated with"
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Participle clauses:
- "preventing countless cases"
- "Having watched my uncle undergo"
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Conditional (hypothetical past):
- "would have detected"
- "would have required"
-
Comparative structures:
- "more effectively than treatment"
- "far less invasive and more successful"
![[تصویر: جدول مقایسهای هزینه پیشگیری در مقابل درمان با نمودار میلهای]](/media/uploads/ermes/2025/12/21/5.jpg)
نمونه مقاله 6: موضوع کار (Two-Part Question)
سوال:
"Many people now work from home using modern technology. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend for workers?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: Remote work has transformed employment patterns globally, enabled by internet connectivity and digital collaboration tools. This essay will examine both the benefits and drawbacks that this shift presents for employees.
Body Paragraph 1 - Advantages: Working from home offers workers significant lifestyle improvements. Eliminating daily commutes saves both time and money that would otherwise be spent on transportation, fuel, and vehicle maintenance. An average commuter in London spends 74 minutes daily traveling, time that remote workers can instead dedicate to family, hobbies, or additional rest. Furthermore, home-based work provides greater flexibility in managing personal responsibilities. Parents can better balance childcare with professional duties, attending school events without requesting leave. I personally experienced this benefit when working remotely allowed me to care for my elderly mother while maintaining full-time employment, something impossible with traditional office requirements. Additionally, many people report higher productivity at home, free from office distractions like unnecessary meetings and colleague interruptions.
Body Paragraph 2 - Disadvantages: However, remote work presents notable challenges. Social isolation emerges as a primary concern, as workers miss the casual interactions and camaraderie that office environments naturally provide. This lack of social contact can lead to feelings of loneliness and disconnection from the organization, potentially affecting mental health and job satisfaction. Moreover, the boundary between professional and personal life becomes blurred when one's living space doubles as a workspace. Many remote workers struggle to "switch off," finding themselves checking emails during dinner or working late into evenings. According to research from Stanford University, remote employees work an average of 1.4 days more per month than office-based counterparts, risking burnout. Finally, career advancement may suffer, as remote workers often have less visibility to management and fewer opportunities for mentoring relationships.
Conclusion: In conclusion, while remote work provides flexibility, time savings, and potential productivity gains, it also creates risks of isolation, work-life imbalance, and limited career progression. Whether these advantages outweigh disadvantages depends largely on individual circumstances and employers' support structures.
تعداد کلمات: 335
تحلیل نمره 9:
Task Response: 9/9
- پاسخ متعادل به advantages و disadvantages
- هر بخش کاملاً توسعه یافته
- مثال شخصی واقعی (مادر سالمند)
- دادههای آماری (London commute, Stanford research)
- نتیجهگیری متعادل
Coherence and Cohesion: 9/9
Balanced structure:
- Para 1: Advantages (170 words)
- Para 2: Disadvantages (165 words)
- تقریباً همطول ✓
Transition phrases:
- "Furthermore", "Additionally" (برای advantages)
- "However", "Moreover", "Finally" (برای disadvantages)
Lexical Resource: 9/9
Less common expressions:
- transformed employment patterns
- digital collaboration tools
- managing personal responsibilities
- camaraderie
- disconnection from the organization
- boundary becomes blurred
- doubles as a workspace
- "switch off" (اصطلاح)
- career advancement
- visibility to management
- mentoring relationships
- support structures
Precise vocabulary:
- "Eliminating" نه "removing"
- "Notable challenges" نه "big problems"
- "Emerges as" نه "is"
Grammatical Range: 9/9
Complex structures:
- Gerunds as subjects: "Eliminating daily commutes saves..."
- Relative clauses: "time that remote workers can", "that office environments provide"
- Participle clauses: "enabled by internet", "risking burnout"
- Conditionals: "when working remotely allowed"
نمونه مقاله 7: موضوع جرم (Discussion Essay)
سوال:
"Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others argue that circumstances and motivation should always be taken into account. Discuss both views and give your opinion."
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: The appropriate approach to criminal sentencing has long divided legal theorists and policymakers. While standardized penalties offer certain benefits, I believe that flexible sentencing considering individual circumstances produces fairer outcomes.
Body Paragraph 1 - Fixed Punishments: Advocates of mandatory sentences argue that uniformity ensures justice and equality before the law. When identical crimes receive identical punishments regardless of who commits them, the system appears transparent and free from judicial bias or corruption. This consistency provides clear deterrence, as potential offenders know exactly what consequences they face. Furthermore, fixed sentencing prevents wealthy or influential criminals from receiving preferential treatment through skilled lawyers or connections. In societies where corruption is prevalent, removing judicial discretion can protect against manipulation of the justice system.
Body Paragraph 2 - Flexible Sentencing: However, I am convinced that context matters profoundly in criminal justice. Crimes that appear identical on paper may have vastly different underlying circumstances. Consider theft: a desperate parent stealing food for starving children differs morally from a wealthy kleptomaniac shoplifting for thrills. Ignoring such distinctions produces unjust outcomes. Additionally, first-time offenders deserve different consideration than repeat criminals. A teenager making one terrible mistake should not receive the same punishment as a career criminal, as rehabilitation potential varies enormously. In my own community, I witnessed a young man who shoplifted once receive excessive punishment under mandatory sentencing laws. This harsh response, rather than reforming him, hardened his attitude and he later committed more serious crimes. A judge with discretion might have chosen counseling and community service, potentially preventing his criminal trajectory.
Body Paragraph 3: Moreover, circumstances surrounding crimes, such as mental illness, coercion, or self-defense, demand judicial consideration. A person with untreated schizophrenia who commits violence during a psychotic episode requires medical intervention, not purely punitive measures. Similarly, someone forced to commit crimes under death threats faces fundamentally different moral culpability than a willing participant.
Conclusion: In conclusion, although fixed punishments offer consistency and combat corruption, I believe that flexible sentencing that considers individual circumstances and rehabilitation potential serves justice more effectively. The law should be consistent in principles but flexible in application.
تعداد کلمات: 360
تحلیل نمره 9:
Task Response: 9/9
- بررسی عمیق هر دو دیدگاه ✓
- نظر شخصی قوی با دلیل محکم ✓
- استفاده از مثال شخصی قانعکننده (جوان در جامعه) ✓
- پاراگراف سوم قوی برای تقویت استدلال ✓
Coherence and Cohesion: 9/9
ساختار 5 پاراگرافی: این مقاله نشان میدهد که گاهی 3 body paragraphs بهتر از 2 است.
Signposting عالی:
- "Advocates of X argue..."
- "However, I am convinced..."
- "Moreover..." (پاراگراف اضافی برای تقویت)
Lexical Resource: 9/9
واژگان حقوقی:
- legal theorists
- policymakers
- standardized penalties
- flexible sentencing
- mandatory sentences
- judicial bias
- judicial discretion
- rehabilitation potential
- career criminal
- moral culpability
- punitive measures
Academic phrases:
- "has long divided"
- "appears transparent"
- "varies enormously"
- "demands judicial consideration"
Grammatical Range: 9/9
ساختارهای پیچیده:
- Reduced relative clauses: "Crimes that appear identical"
- Participle phrases: "Ignoring such distinctions"
- Complex conditionals: "A judge with discretion might have chosen"
- Contrast structures: "differs morally from"
نمونه مقاله 8: موضوع فرهنگ (Opinion Essay)
سوال:
"Museums and art galleries should concentrate on local works rather than showing the cultures and artworks of other countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: The focus of cultural institutions regarding local versus international exhibits sparks ongoing debate. While showcasing local heritage has merit, I strongly disagree that museums should exclusively emphasize domestic works, as exposure to diverse cultures provides invaluable educational and social benefits.
Body Paragraph 1: Admittedly, local museums play a crucial role in preserving and promoting national identity. By displaying regional artifacts, traditional crafts, and historical documents, these institutions help younger generations understand their cultural roots and heritage. This is particularly vital in countries where globalization threatens to erode traditional customs. For instance, the National Museum of Iran houses ancient Persian artifacts that connect modern Iranians to their rich historical legacy, fostering national pride and cultural continuity.
Body Paragraph 2: However, limiting museums to local content would severely diminish their educational value. Exposure to diverse cultures cultivates tolerance, empathy, and global citizenship. When visitors encounter Egyptian mummies, Japanese samurai armor, or Aboriginal Australian art, they develop appreciation for humanity's varied creative expressions. In my own experience, visiting the British Museum as a teenager and seeing artifacts from dozens of civilizations profoundly expanded my worldview. I realized that my own culture represented just one thread in humanity's rich tapestry. This revelation fostered humility and curiosity about other societies that has shaped my perspective ever since.
Body Paragraph 3: Furthermore, international exhibits facilitate cultural exchange and mutual understanding between nations. In an increasingly interconnected world facing global challenges like climate change and pandemics, fostering cross-cultural appreciation becomes essential. Museums that display both local and international works create opportunities for comparative analysis, allowing visitors to recognize both cultural uniqueness and universal human experiences. The Louvre Abu Dhabi exemplifies this approach brilliantly, presenting artworks from multiple civilizations side by side, demonstrating shared human aspirations across cultures and eras.
Conclusion: In conclusion, while museums should certainly include local works, I firmly believe that restricting them to domestic exhibits would be shortsighted. International collections enrich education, promote tolerance, and facilitate the cross-cultural understanding necessary for a peaceful, interconnected world.
تعداد کلمات: 345
تحلیل نمره 9:
Task Response: 9/9
ساختار استدلال قوی:
- Concession (پذیرش نکته مثبت دیدگاه مخالف)
- Main argument (استدلال اصلی)
- Additional strong point (نکته اضافی قوی)
مثالهای متنوع:
- National Museum of Iran (محلی)
- British Museum (تجربه شخصی)
- Louvre Abu Dhabi (مدرن)
Coherence and Cohesion: 9/9
Sophisticated transitions:
- "Admittedly" (پذیرش counter-argument)
- "However, limiting..." (مخالفت قوی)
- "Furthermore" (دلیل اضافی)
Reference words:
- "these institutions", "This is particularly vital"
- "This revelation", "this approach"
Lexical Resource: 9/9
واژگان فرهنگی/هنری:
- cultural institutions
- showcasing heritage
- regional artifacts
- traditional crafts
- cultural roots
- erode traditional customs
- historical legacy
- national pride
- cultural continuity
- global citizenship
- cross-cultural appreciation
- comparative analysis
- universal human experiences
Metaphorical language:
- "one thread in humanity's rich tapestry"
- "sparks ongoing debate"
Grammatical Range: 9/9
- Gerund subjects: "Limiting museums would..."
- Complex sentences: "When visitors encounter..., they develop..."
- Perfect tenses: "has shaped my perspective"
- Passive voice: "are housed", "are displayed"
![[تصویر: گالری موزه با آثار هنری از فرهنگهای مختلف در کنار هم]](/media/uploads/ermes/2025/12/21/2.jpg)
نمونه مقاله 9: موضوع فناوری (Advantages-Disadvantages)
سوال:
"In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?"
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: The digital revolution has dramatically altered how people consume written content. While I acknowledge that online reading has increased substantially, I disagree that physical publications will disappear entirely, as both formats offer distinct advantages for different readers and contexts.
Body Paragraph 1: Several factors support the prediction of declining print media. Firstly, digital content provides unparalleled convenience and accessibility. Readers can carry thousands of books on a single device, access articles instantly, and search for specific information within seconds. Moreover, online platforms offer multimedia enhancements impossible in print, such as embedded videos, interactive graphics, and hyperlinks to related content. Financially, digital subscriptions typically cost significantly less than purchasing physical newspapers daily or buying hardcover books. Environmental concerns also favor digital formats, as eliminating paper production and transportation reduces carbon emissions considerably.
Body Paragraph 2: However, printed materials retain enduring appeal for several reasons. Many readers, myself included, find physical books more pleasant and less fatiguing for extended reading. Scientific research from the Journal of Applied Cognitive Psychology indicates that people retain information better when reading from paper compared to screens, possibly because physical pages provide spatial and tactile memory cues that aid comprehension. Furthermore, books as physical objects hold sentimental and aesthetic value that digital files cannot replicate. My bookshelf displays volumes inherited from my grandfather, each containing his handwritten notes and representing cherished memories that a digital library could never capture.
Body Paragraph 3: Additionally, practical considerations ensure print's continued existence. Digital access requires internet connectivity and functioning devices, neither of which is universally available. In developing regions with limited infrastructure, printed materials remain more accessible and reliable. Power outages, device malfunctions, or lack of charging facilities do not affect physical books. Moreover, many people simply prefer the tangible experience of turning pages and owning physical collections, regardless of convenience arguments.
Conclusion: In conclusion, while digital reading will likely become predominant, I believe printed newspapers and books will persist as niche products serving readers who value their tactile, aesthetic, and practical benefits. Both formats will coexist, serving different needs and preferences.
تعداد کلمات: 355
تحلیل نمره 9:
Task Response: 9/9
- موضع واضح: Partially disagree ✓
- توسعه هر دو دیدگاه (digital و print) ✓
- استناد به تحقیقات (Journal of Applied Cognitive Psychology) ✓
- مثال شخصی عمیق (کتابهای پدربزرگ) ✓
Coherence and Cohesion: 9/9
Balanced 3-body structure:
- Para 1: Digital advantages
- Para 2: Print advantages (اصلی)
- Para 3: Practical reasons for print
Linking strategies:
- "Firstly", "Moreover", "Financially" (در پاراگراف digital)
- "However" (گذار به print)
- "Additionally" (دلایل اضافی)
Lexical Resource: 9/9
Technology vocabulary:
- digital revolution
- unparalleled convenience
- multimedia enhancements
- embedded videos
- interactive graphics
- hyperlinks
- digital subscriptions
- spatial and tactile memory cues
Print vocabulary:
- physical publications
- enduring appeal
- sentimental and aesthetic value
- tangible experience
- physical collections
Academic style:
- "retain enduring appeal"
- "cannot replicate"
- "ensure print's continued existence"
- "will persist as niche products"
Grammatical Range: 9/9
Advanced structures:
- Comparatives: "more pleasant", "better when reading"
- Relative clauses: "memories that a digital library could never capture"
- Participle phrases: "possibly because physical pages provide"
- Conditional: "neither of which is universally available"
نمونه مقاله 10: موضوع آموزش (Two-Part Question)
سوال:
"In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion."
مقاله نمره 9:
Introduction: Child labor remains a controversial issue globally, with passionate arguments on both sides. This essay will examine why some view youth employment as harmful while others see benefits, before explaining why I believe the appropriateness depends entirely on the nature and conditions of work.
Body Paragraph 1 - Opposition to Child Work: Those opposing child employment raise legitimate concerns about exploitation and developmental harm. When children work in hazardous conditions, miss education, or endure excessive hours, their physical health, safety, and future opportunities suffer tremendously. In developing nations, millions of children labor in factories, mines, or agricultural fields under dangerous conditions for minimal wages, essentially trapped in cycles of poverty that education could break. The Convention on the Rights of the Child, adopted by the United Nations, recognizes education as a fundamental right and restricts child labor precisely because work often prevents school attendance. Moreover, childhood should be a period of play, learning, and development rather than economic productivity.
Body Paragraph 2 - Support for Child Work: Conversely, proponents argue that appropriate part-time work teaches valuable life skills and responsibility. In affluent countries, teenagers working limited hours at cafes or shops gain work ethic, time management abilities, and customer service skills while earning spending money. Such experiences can build confidence, independence, and understanding of financial matters. I worked weekends at a bookstore during secondary school, which taught me punctuality, responsibility, and interpersonal skills that benefited me throughout university and my career. This experience never compromised my education because it was limited in hours and age-appropriate.
Body Paragraph 3 - My Position: Therefore, I believe the debate requires nuance rather than absolute positions. Child labor in exploitative, hazardous, or educationally disruptive contexts is unequivocally wrong and should be eliminated. However, voluntary, safe, and limited part-time work for older teenagers in developed countries can provide positive experiences. The key distinctions involve age (adolescents versus young children), working conditions (safe versus dangerous), hours (reasonable versus excessive), and impact on education (supportive versus detrimental). International regulations should protect children from exploitation while allowing beneficial work experiences in appropriate circumstances.
Conclusion: In conclusion, while child labor in its exploitative forms demands abolition, limited and appropriate teenage employment can offer valuable development opportunities. Context, conditions, and the child's wellbeing must determine acceptability rather than blanket prohibitions or permissions.
تعداد کلمات: 380
تحلیل نمره 9:
Task Response: 9/9
ساختار عالی Discussion + Opinion:
- Para 1: دیدگاه مخالف (با همدلی)
- Para 2: دیدگاه موافق (با مثال شخصی)
- Para 3: نظر خود با nuance ✓
عمق تحلیل: نویسنده نشان میدهد موضوع پیچیده است و پاسخ ساده وجود ندارد.
Coherence and Cohesion: 9/9
Sophisticated organization: مقاله از ساختار 4 پاراگرافی به 5 پاراگرافی ارتقا یافته تا فضای کافی برای nuanced opinion داشته باشد.
Advanced cohesion:
- "Conversely" (کنتراست قوی)
- "Therefore" (نتیجهگیری منطقی)
- "The key distinctions involve..." (لیست کردن رسمی)
Lexical Resource: 9/9
Academic vocabulary:
- remains controversial
- passionate arguments
- legitimate concerns
- developmental harm
- exploitation
- hazardous conditions
- cycles of poverty
- economic productivity
- nuance rather than absolute positions
- unequivocally wrong
- blanket prohibitions
Topic-specific collocations:
- "child labor", "youth employment"
- "work ethic", "time management"
- "customer service skills"
- "financially literate"
Grammatical Range: 9/9
Complex structures:
- Complex conditionals: "When children work..., their health... suffer"
- Passive voice: "adopted by the United Nations"
- Non-finite clauses: "while earning spending money"
- Participle clauses: "essentially trapped in cycles"
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جمعبندی و الگوهای مشترک در مقالات نمره 9
پس از تحلیل این 10 مقاله نمره 9، چند الگوی مشترک واضح است:
1. ساختار و سازماندهی
✅ همه مقالات:
- مقدمه روشن با thesis statement واضح
- پاراگرافبندی منطقی
- نتیجهگیری که thesis را تکرار میکند (با کلمات متفاوت)
✅ تعداد کلمات:
- هیچکدام کمتر از 270 کلمه نیستند
- اکثر بین 330-365 کلمه هستند
- طول بیشتر = فضای بیشتر برای توسعه ایدهها
2. Task Response
✅ الگوهای موفقیت:
- پاسخ کامل به تمام بخشهای سوال
- موضع واضح و ثابت
- مثالهای متنوع: شخصی، آماری، تحقیقاتی
- عمق تحلیل، نه فقط لیست کردن نکات
3. Coherence and Cohesion
✅ Linking words متنوع: نه فقط "Firstly, Secondly, Finally" بلکه:
- However, Nevertheless, Conversely
- Furthermore, Moreover, Additionally
- Therefore, Consequently, Thus
- Admittedly, That said
✅ Reference words:
- This phenomenon, Such practices
- These advantages, This approach
4. Lexical Resource
✅ استراتژیهای واژگانی:
- استفاده از synonyms برای پرهیز از تکرار
- Collocations طبیعی
- واژگان topic-specific
- استفاده محدود از idioms (فقط در جای مناسب)
مقایسه واژگان:
| سطح 6 | سطح 9 |
|---|---|
| very important | crucial, vital, essential |
| bad effect | detrimental impact, adverse effect |
| good for | beneficial to, advantageous for |
| make better | enhance, improve, ameliorate |
| help to | facilitate, enable, foster |
| because of this | consequently, as a result, therefore |
5. Grammatical Range
✅ تنوع ساختارها در هر مقاله:
- Complex sentences (2-3 clauses)
- Passive voice
- Participle clauses
- Relative clauses
- Conditional structures
- Perfect tenses
- Modal verbs
نکته مهم: هیچکدام از این مقالات ساختارهای بیش از حد پیچیده ندارند. پیچیدگی طبیعی است، نه مصنوعی.
اشتباهات رایج که باید از آنها پرهیز کنید
❌ اشتباه 1: Memorised phrases
مثال: "It is a contentious issue whether..." در هر مقدمه
بهتر است: متن را طبیعی نگه دارید. از عبارات حفظی فقط زمانی استفاده کنید که واقعاً مناسب هستند.
❌ اشتباه 2: Over-complication
مثال: "Notwithstanding the aforementioned considerations, one must acknowledge..."
بهتر است: "However, it is important to recognize that..."
❌ اشتباه 3: بدون مثال نوشتن
مثال: صرفاً نوشتن "Education is important for society" بدون توضیح چرا یا چگونه.
بهتر است: همیشه Explanation + Example بدهید.
❌ اشتباه 4: تکرار کلمات
مثال: "Students should study hard. Studying is important for students."
بهتر است: "Students should study diligently. Academic dedication is crucial for learners."
❌ اشتباه 5: نوشتن مقدمه طولانی
مثال: مقدمه 100 کلمهای که تاریخچه موضوع را شرح میدهد.
بهتر است: مقدمه 40-60 کلمهای که مستقیم به سوال پاسخ میدهد.
چکلیست نهایی برای مقاله نمره 9
قبل از اینکه مقاله خود را نهایی کنید، این موارد را بررسی کنید:
Task Response:
- ☑️ همه بخشهای سوال پاسخ داده شده؟
- ☑️ نظر/موضع من واضح است؟
- ☑️ حداقل دو مثال/توضیح برای هر نکته اصلی دارم؟
- ☑️ در نتیجهگیری thesis را تکرار کردهام (با کلمات متفاوت)؟
Coherence and Cohesion:
- ☑️ هر پاراگراف یک ایده اصلی دارد؟
- ☑️ از linking words متنوع استفاده کردهام؟
- ☑️ reference words به درستی به جملات قبلی اشاره میکنند؟
- ☑️ جریان منطقی بین پاراگرافها وجود دارد؟
Lexical Resource:
- ☑️ از synonyms برای پرهیز از تکرار استفاده کردهام؟
- ☑️ collocations طبیعی هستند؟
- ☑️ واژگان topic-specific دارم؟
- ☑️ از کلمات خیلی basic پرهیز کردهام (good, bad, important)?
Grammatical Range and Accuracy:
- ☑️ حداقل 5 نوع ساختار مختلف دارم؟
- ☑️ خطای گرامری ندارم؟
- ☑️ تمام جملاتم punctuation صحیح دارند؟
- ☑️ زمانهای فعل consistent هستند؟
General:
- ☑️ حداقل 250 کلمه (ترجیحاً 280-350)؟
- ☑️ مقدمه 40-60 کلمه؟
- ☑️ هر body paragraph حدود 90-120 کلمه؟
- ☑️ نتیجهگیری 40-60 کلمه؟
نکته نهایی این بخش
مهمترین درس از این 10 مقاله نمره 9 این است: طبیعی بودن مهمتر از پیچیدگی است. تمام این مقالات مثل یک فرد تحصیلکرده که درباره موضوعی فکر کرده صحبت میکنند، نه یک ماشین که جملات حفظی تکرار میکند.
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